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The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows visits to and from the UK from 1979 to 1999, and the bar graph shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line diagram shows the
number
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 of
visits
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 to and from the United Kingdom made by the
UK
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 and overseas
residents
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 from 1979 to 1999,
whereas
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 the bar chart indicates the most popular countries which
UK
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residents
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 visited in 1999. Units are measured in millions.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
visits
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 abroad by
British
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 increased gradually,
while
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visits
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 to the
UK
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 by foreigners rose slightly. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of
visits
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 abroad by the
UK
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residents
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 was higher than
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by non-
UK
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residents
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. It can be noted that France was the most popular country visited by the
British
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 in 1999. With regards to the
number
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 of
visits
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 abroad by the
British
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, it started from about 12
million
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 and reached its peak at around 52
million
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 in 1999.
Similarly
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, the
number
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 of
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by foreigners was 10 in the first year and slightly climbed to 26
millionmillions
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million millions
million million
 in the
last
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 year.
It is clear that
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 France and Spain were the most popular countries for
UK
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residents
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 with 11 and 9
million
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visits
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 respectively.
Likewise
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, the USA and Greece were less interesting and had just around 3 to 4
million
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 visitors.
Finally
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, Turkey was the least visited country and had just around 2.5
million
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British
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 visitors in 1999.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visits, uk, residents, british, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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