The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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These two maps depict a public

park

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in two distinctive timelines, one is for the the first day after the opening of

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place in 1920, and the other one is for today.

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, we can see a lot of changes have happened in

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area and turned

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park

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into a recreation

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for all individuals,

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, the only thing that remained unchanged is the rose garden which is located in the north-west of

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area.

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, the Fountain in the middle of

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park

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from 1920, was destroyed completely and turned into an enormous rose garden, surrounded by four seats for people.

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, on the west side of

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area

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a massive Amphitheatre for concerts was erected which used to be a Stage for musicians back in 1920.

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, the rose garden and Pond for water plants in the northeast were removed

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, we can see a new cafe and a Children's playground on today’s date.

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, these days, there is a Water feature close to Eldon Street ,

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, near

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Water feature, we can see an underground car

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for individuals, they both were built in the same place which used to be a glasshouse and some seats in 1920.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

203 words

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you have a complaint about the hotel you stayed at while attending a meeting that we booked by the organiser of a company. write a letter to the organiser of the meeting and include, details about the meeting, the problem you face and what should be done.

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