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a magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called ‘The book that influenced me most'. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter -describe what this book was about -explain how this book influenced you -say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Editor, I want to
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 because I saw your
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 about 'The
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 that influenced me most'. I had read a
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 about aviation.
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 name is 'MAYDAY MAYDAY MAYDAY'. And writer name is Menderes Çakıcı. He is working as a commercial pilot at Turkish Airlines. And
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, that
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 influenced me
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. I can describe what
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book
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 was about. It was about emergency landings of planes.
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, some CRM( Crew Resources Management) subjects
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to
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 the
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. I can highly
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recommend
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book
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, because it would be effective for
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 or new pilots. It was very influenced
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. Especially,
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 I was reading, I was listening to voices in the
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cockpit
. Because the writer wrote the conversations between the two captains as if we were listening aloud. In my opinion, that
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 was very impressive. Thanks to
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writter
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, I felt like, I was in the
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.
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, I guess, the
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 would influence a lot of people who are interested
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 aviation. So,
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 why, I wanted to share my opinion with you. I would be very pleased
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 if you included
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book
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 in the article. Thank you from now
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 I wish you good work days. Have a nice day. Sincerely, Marry White Sincerely

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Grammar & Punctuation
Consider proofreading your letter to correct minor grammatical errors and typos for improved clarity.
Structure
Enhance the structure of your letter by using paragraphs more distinctly to separate your introduction, the main body (descriptions and explanations), and your conclusion.
Content Depth
To make your letter more engaging, you might include more specific examples of how the book influenced you or how it might influence others, providing a deeper insight.
Task Response
You did a great job describing the book and its impact on you, which meets the task requirement effectively.
Tone
Your closing remarks are polite and appropriate for a letter to an editor, showcasing a good writing tone.
Personal Voice
Your enthusiasm for the book and its subject matter comes through clearly, adding a personable touch to your letter.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • influential
  • perspective
  • transformative
  • introspection
  • universal
  • timeless
  • contemporary
  • resonate
  • inspiration
  • genre
  • anecdote
  • relevance
  • beliefs
  • motivations
  • significance
  • courteous
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