The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013

The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013
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The provided bar chart illustrates the proportion of
time
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Australian parents spent assisting their children with
tasks
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in 2013.
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,
mothers
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attended more than fathers to help their children , particularly in dressing
tasks
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. The biggest portion of cooperated
tasks
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belonged to playing games. It is clear from the illustration that the main activity that
mothers
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spent
time
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helping their children was dressing approximately three-quarters.
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, they had highlighted attendance in other
tasks
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including doing homework, playing games, and preparing for bed just over a half, about a quarter, and just above 40%, respectively. It is interesting to note that the participation
time
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of fathers was much less than
mothers
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in all categories. The highest cooperation between fathers and
mothers
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was in playing games exactly 70% and they spent about 50% of their
time
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preparing for bed.
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, Spending hours doing homework and dressing was less than other activities by about 40% and just above 20%, respectively.
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