The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The map
display
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the waterfront
area
in the town of Darwin as it was in 2009 and its appearance in 2014.
Overall
, the central part around the
lake
remained approximately unchanged, except little development. By 2014, the main change was that below the
lake
industrial
area
had been replaced by
trees
and new buildings. In the circle of the
footpath
on the left from the
lake
, an industrial
area
was demolished and made way for a swimming pool. The
lake
and
trees
inside the
footpath
and school and convention
center
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out of the
footpath
on the northwest stayed at the same place. On the right from the
lake
on both sides of the
footpath
, swimming pools and fishing
area
had not changed. Below the
area
with the
lake
residential buildings were expanded from 3 to 6 in two lines and next to them the
trees
were appeared to 2014. On the west of the buildings, a university was constructed.
Moreover
, the new
footpath
appeared from the side of the road through the
area
to the coast.
At the end
of the
footpath
in the sea, a harbour was installed.
Finally
, on the south of the new
footpath
, there were lots of
trees
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, lake, trees, footpath with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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