The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The map
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the waterfront
area
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in the town of Darwin as it was in 2009 and its appearance in 2014.
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, the central part around the
lake
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remained approximately unchanged, except little development. By 2014, the main change was that below the
lake
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industrial
area
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had been replaced by
trees
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and new buildings. In the circle of the
footpath
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on the left from the
lake
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, an industrial
area
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was demolished and made way for a swimming pool. The
lake
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and
trees
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inside the
footpath
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and school and convention
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out of the
footpath
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on the northwest stayed at the same place. On the right from the
lake
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on both sides of the
footpath
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, swimming pools and fishing
area
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had not changed. Below the
area
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with the
lake
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residential buildings were expanded from 3 to 6 in two lines and next to them the
trees
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were appeared to 2014. On the west of the buildings, a university was constructed.
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, the new
footpath
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appeared from the side of the road through the
area
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to the coast.
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of the
footpath
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in the sea, a harbour was installed.
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, on the south of the new
footpath
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, there were lots of
trees
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.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, lake, trees, footpath with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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