The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in 2009.
The bar chart compares shares of expenditures for different main categories in four countries in 2009.
It is clear that
shares of food housing and transportation had
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noticeable
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high
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increase in the United
States
,
Canada
, the United
Kingdom
and
Japan
compared to other figures
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care and clothing. Regarding Food expenditure,
Japan
stood at the highest level and it doubled approximately that United
States
, standing at 23 per
cent
. In the United
Kingdom
, there was
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rise in food expenditure than
Canada
, at around 21 per
cent
and 15 per
cent
, respectively.
Additionally
, Housing was the highest figure among other expenditures.
Canada
was the lowest index in
this
category, standing at 20 per
cent
.
Japan
and the United
Kingdom
were higher than it and they had 2 per
cent
and 4 per
cent
increases, compared to
Canada
's figure. In housing,
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States
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exactly the biggest number, at around 26 per
cent
.
Moreover
, the figures for Transportation in the United
States
and
Canada
did not have a big difference, standing at 19 per
cent
and 20 per
cent
, respectively. The United
Kingdom
's index was higher than
Japan
's. As for Health care and Clothing expenditures, in all parts there were unnoticeable figures, they all were under the 10 per
cent
index.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditures
  • categories
  • shares
  • percentage
  • comparison
  • analysis
  • factors
  • spending patterns
  • living standards
  • priorities
  • trends
  • bar chart
  • economic
  • cultural influences
  • household budget
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