In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?
Several years ahead, many types of motor vehicles like cars, buses, and trucks would be autonomous
while
the users would be treated as passengers. This
essay disagrees with the statement because human supervision is still required to mitigate technological drawbacks and some areas have challenging tracks that only can be tackled with proficient driving skills.
The development of artificial intelligence (AI) in autonomous driving cannot merely replace the role of humans in driving. The technology
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Furthermore
, some countries with diverse demographic landscapes, provide many types of road paths and its challenges for driving skills. Presently, the AI algorithms of autonomous vehicles only be trained in conventional urban road tracks which serve as a convenient way for cars to move. This
type of technology
is incapable of driving on difficult tracks in the side of countries. For instance
, the Indonesian landscape is composed of highlands and steep roads that can be challenging for drivers to surpass.
In conclusion, a lot of vehicles in the future will utilize autonomous technology
while
users are treated as passengers. However
, this
statement is impossible to implement because a safe driving experience can only be achieved through human supervision because humans are more aware of the technological drawbacks and trained to tackle difficult road paths.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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Task Achievement
Consider refining your argument to make it more persuasive. While you have presented a stance that opposes the notion of fully autonomous vehicles, offering a balanced view by acknowledging some potential benefits before elaborating on the disadvantages may strengthen your position.
Coherence & Cohesion
Be mindful of grammatical errors and ambiguity in your sentences, as they can hinder the clarity of your message. Proofreading your work for errors and considering sentence structure can improve the overall quality of your essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance coherence, ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea followed by consistent supporting details. Using transitional phrases can help link your ideas more effectively.
Task Achievement
You've provided clear examples to support your arguments, which enhances the persuasiveness of your essay.
Coherence & Cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present and generally relate well to the task, contributing to a structured and complete response.
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