IELTS essay, topic: Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home, why and what are the advantages/disadvantages? Nowadays many people choose ready-made food and refuse to cook at home. Why do you think it happens? What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a choice?
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to prefer
impact
in there health, some individuals Correct subject-verb agreement
impacts
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that fast Verb problem
say
food
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is not
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very
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with , its
common in our society that people go to Replace the word
it's
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a restaurant
the restaurant
restaurant
and fast Fix the agreement mistake
restaurants
food
instead
cooking
or making Change preposition
of cooking
food
at home , that
can cost a lot Correct pronoun usage
which
in
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of
time
, for
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the person will lose Add a comma
example,
his
money Correct pronoun usage
apply
more
in fast Correct quantifier usage
apply
food
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the real effect in Correct your spelling
furthermore
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health , fast Remove the redundancy
apply
food
bad for health and can influence in mind and behaviour also
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another
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other hand
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a restaurant
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several families when they meeting
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meet
they
bring some Correct pronoun usage
apply
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from outside or meets at restaurants , that can be more easy to them and fast.
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cons and pros Change the verb form
have
in
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at
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the same
time
the individual can make it clear to him and not all time
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