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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart compares percentages of sales and drinking habits of
coffee
 and tea in five
cities
that
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Sydney
,
Melbourne
,
Brisbane
,
Adelaide
,
Hobart
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and Hobart
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 in Australia. General, went to a café for
coffee
 and tea collected
high
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higher
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 percentages than others in five
cities
 in the
last
 four
weeks
. The lowest
percent
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 was showed in bought fresh
coffee
 in the same period in these
cities
. In
survey
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the survey
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 instant
coffee
 was
in
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an
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 average discount The chart shows going to
cafe
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cafes
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 for
coffe
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coffee
 and tea mentioned in the
heighest
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highest
 portion in 3
cities
which
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Sydney
,
Melbourne
 and
Hobart
 just
abow
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about
 60% but
this
 was observed
heigher
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higher
 in
Melbourne
approximately
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at approximately
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 64% in
last
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the last
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weeks
. In
Brisbane
 and
Adelaide
this
this
 aspect
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has lower
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lower
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 55% and 49% percent, respectively in recent
weeks
. Buying instant
coffe
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coffee
 was the top fraction in
Hobart
 about 54%,
then
 in
Brisbane
 53%. The lowest
poin
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point
 in
this
 aspect was in
Sydney
 45%,
Melbourne
 and
Adelaide
 there was
3
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a 3
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% percentage difference from each other. Buying fresh
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coffee
coffe
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coffee
 was the same
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proportion
propartion
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proportion
 in
Brisbane
 and
Adelaide
 under 35% in
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the last
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last
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the last
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 four
weeks
. Residents of
Sydney
 and
Melbourne
goot
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grew
 together among from 40% to 45% in
a
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the
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last
 month.
Degree
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The degree
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 of buying fresh
coffe
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coffee
 in
Hobart
 specified nearly 40%
in
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, cities, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, weeks, coffe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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