The diagram shows the procedure for University entry for highschool graduates.

The given flow chart represents how the students who

had

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have

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completed their higher academic study can apply for the universities.

overall

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, the procedure starts from two different

point

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and at

last

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both meet at the same end.

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, it is clearly seen from the flow chart that,

first

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step is to obtain a high school. Afterwards, students have to download and complete

application

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the application

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form and application for

alternative

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the alternative

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course through

website

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the website

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, they have to send both

the

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apply

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forms to admin. If some provisional documentation is required,

then

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the trainees have to provide

compile

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compiled

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documentation and again send it to admin and

this

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process takes two weeks.

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, by chance if the pupils get rejection

then

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they have to do

this

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process again,

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however

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this

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can't be possible if

students

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students'

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application

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applications

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get cancelled. Apart from these, if the admin

approve

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approves

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apply

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the document,

then

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after two weeks enrolment will be accepted.

Followed by

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this

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, enrolled pupils have to select subjects they will be studying

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the university,

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, after registering with

Dean

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the Dean

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, the trainees can

finally

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enter the university.

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May 1, 2024

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Variety in linking words

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Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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179 words

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