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Writing Samples
Band 5

You have been facing a lot of issues at work lately. Write a letter to your Reporting Manager informing him about this. In your letter: • Explain what / who is affecting your work and people's attitude towards you • What your expectations are from this work/office • How / what your manager can do to help you with these problems

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Dear Sir or Madam, Hope you're fine. I am writing
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 letter to share with you my problem related to
the
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office work. I am the head of
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the manegment
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manegment
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management
 department.
Although
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this
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 was not my
choise
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choice
but
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on your
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recommendation
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 I take
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responsibilty
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responsibility
.
Furthermore
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, since I have been working in
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depatment
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department
 I faced
lot
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 of
problmes
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problems
 which
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affected
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 not only my health but
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creates
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 disturbance for my family. I have to face
irresponsible
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the irresponsible
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 attitude of the staff which
irretate
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irritate
irritated
 me and
resuling
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results
 in
inefficency
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inefficiency
 of the work so it is very difficult for me to manage these issues myself.
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. I need your
coopration
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cooperation
 to resolve these issues. please allow me to change my department so that I could be more
produtive
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productive
 for the company. Please take my request
seriousely
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seriously
. I hope you never let me down. I shall be
garateful
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grateful
 for your kindness. Yours Faithfully, Kunwar
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accuracy
Consider revising for spelling and grammatical accuracy to enhance clarity and professionalism.
structure
Organize your thoughts more clearly by ensuring each paragraph focuses on one main idea, and transitions smoothly to the next.
detail
To further improve, elaborate on the specific issues and suggestions for improvement. Providing examples could make your concerns more concrete.
task response
You successfully communicated the main concerns and a specific request which aligns with the task's objectives.
tone
Your sign-off is polite and appropriate for a letter to a superior, contributing to a good tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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