The government spending a lot of money to discover life on other planets. Some people think that government is wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of public. To what extent do you agree?

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this
modern era,
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eourmous
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enormous
amount of currency is
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on discovering whether life on planets other than Earth is possible or not by the higher authorities. Regarding
this
, numerous individuals argue that
due to
this
a large
sum
of
money
is wasted by the
law makers
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and
this
money
should be
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to tackle public problems.
However
, I
am partially agree
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and dis
agres
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agree
agrees
with the given view and my stance is
further
discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, discussing some agreeable side of the latest trend, the first and prominent one is that, the Government should use
this
huge
sum
of
money
to develop their nations by improving infrastructure so people can live a comfortable life.
Moreover
,
money
can
also
be
utilize
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in
public
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sector
such
as to boost the
efficency
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efficiency
of public transport by increasing the number of public vehicles
such
as buses, trains and many more. Apart from these, a
lot
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number of newly
design
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highways must be constructed to improve travelling time and to avoid accidents. On the flip side, I
also
believe that the higher authorities
is
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not wasting
money
by using it in the space sector.
To begin
with,
due to
rise
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in harmful gases
such
as carbon monoxide, carbon dioxide, (FC and many more the Earth is becoming barren day by day and the pollution is swelling drastically.
According to
the
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NASA scientists, living organisms will not be able to survive in
coming
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few centuries.
As a result
, the Government is doing the perfect job by providing
such
a huge
sum
of
money
to do space exploration in order to survive in the future.
To
sum
up, I partially believe in both
view
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. The
Goverment
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government
must continue to utilize s large amount of
curreny
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currency
in
space
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the space
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sector to make sure the
huminity
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humanities
survive in
coming
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the coming
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few centuries, but
also
spend a small number of
money
in public areas
such
as to improve infrastructure and public transport.
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