write a letter to an oncologist
I am writing to refer Mrs. Mario, a
46 years old
assistant manager, who shows Correct your spelling
46-year-old
sign
and symptoms of Fix the agreement mistake
signs
space occupying
Add a hyphen
space-occupying
lesion
in both breasts. She requires your assessment and valuable intervention.
Mrs. Mario came to my clinic today with the Fix the agreement mistake
lesions
complain
of pain in both her breasts. She Replace the word
complaint
also
explained that can touch some lumps there. She was so worried about that,
because the cancer Remove the comma
apply
is
going to her family. Her mother and her grandmother both had a history of cancer.
She had a history of irregular menstruation cycle in 2000. Wrong verb form
was
Additionally
, she had a
surgery Remove the article
apply
in
Change preposition
on
right
breast for cyst resection in 2008. Add an article
the right
However
we do not have full details about that. I should emphasize that she is not married and does not have any Add a comma
However,
breast-feeding
history. She is Correct your spelling
breastfeeding
smoker
and social drinker.
I would appreciate itAdd an article
a smoker
,
if you could visit her urgently for any appropriate Remove the comma
apply
work up
in order to Correct your spelling
workup
ruling
out breast cancer.
Yours sincerely,Change the verb
rule
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Task Achievement
Ensure all medical terms are used correctly and provide more detail if possible, such as specifying 'space occupying lesion' to clarify for better understanding.
Coherence & Cohesion
Consider breaking longer sentences into shorter ones to enhance clarity and readability.
Task Achievement
In future letters, you might want to include more specific patient information, like recent test results, to provide a comprehensive view to the oncologist.
Coherence & Cohesion
The structure of the letter, with a clear introduction, patient history, and a call to action, effectively communicates the patient's situation.
Task Achievement
The use of formal and polite language is appropriate for communicating with a professional colleague.