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This chart below gives the informantion about car ownership in the UK from1975 to 2005.

This chart below gives the informantion about car ownership in the UK from1975 to 2005.
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The line chart provides data regarding car ownership in the United
kingdom
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Kingdom
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 in 30 years between the period 1975 to 2005.
Overall
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, it can be said that
,
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apply
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 the four
cars
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 experienced different
trend
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trends
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. Car 3 had a steep increase to about 9
cars
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 in 2005 . It is interesting to notice that, by 1975 the 2
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cars
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car
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 ownerships started from just above 5
cars
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then
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, there was a rapid increase in the next 10 years to reach approximately 14
cars
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 in 1985.
Afterthat
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After that
, it
is remained
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remains
remained
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steadily
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to
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until
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 1995 , and there was a slight increase
at the end
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 of
period
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the period
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 with just under 20
cars
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.
On the other hand
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, 1 car ownership had A sharp decline from 45 to less than 40 in 1985.
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,it
followed
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was followed
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 by enormous growth to
raech
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reach
 the same point as it started with 45.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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