he diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

he diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.
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the Grange
Park
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as it was in 1920 and its appearance today.
Overall
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, the size of
this
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park
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remained the same and is still based between Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. By the present time, there is a wide range of changes and public parks look fully different. On the north and the south of the
park
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, entrances remained unchanged.
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, the fountain was replaced by a
rose
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garden
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in the middle of the
park
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and seats near the entrances and in the upper and bottom corners of the west side were moved to the
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and placed around the
rose
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garden
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. Meanwhile, the stage for musicians on the west side was transformed into an
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for concerts. On the east side of the
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park
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the
rose
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garden
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was demolished and a cafe was installed there.
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, a pond for water plants next to the
rose
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garden
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made way for a children's play area. On the southeast, a glasshouse was knocked down and a water feature appeared at the same place.
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, seats that stand between the pond and the glasshouse were disappeared.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, rose, garden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • developments
  • modifications
  • landscaping
  • recreational needs
  • enhance
  • functionality
  • vegetation
  • environmental conservation
  • infrastructure improvements
  • community involvement
  • diverse groups
  • outdoor activities
  • environmental stewardship
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