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The table below gives information on concusmer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on concusmer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given table provides the
percentage
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 of how much money consumers spent on various product categories in five countries in 2002.
Overall
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, in
Turkey
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,
people
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 spent much more money on each category
among
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than in
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 other countries,
while
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 in Sweden
people
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 showed the lowest
percentage
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 in total.
According to
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 the chart, in
a
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the
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 food/drinks/tobacco category Turkish
people
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 are
on
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in
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 the first place who spent more money and accounted for 32,14%, followed by Ireland and Italy with 28,91 and 18,80%, respectively. Italian and Swedish consumers spent approximately two times less than
Turkey
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 and the numbers are 16,36 and 15,77%, respectively. For the category of clothing/
footwear
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 there was a leader which was Italy with 9%,
while
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 consumers in
Turkey
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, Spain, and Ireland witnessed almost the same
percentage
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 from 6,63 to 6,43%. The lowest
percentage
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 belonged to Sweden with 5,40%.
Furthermore
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, in general
people
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 in each country spent the lowest part of the budget on leisure/education.
Turkey
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 had the highest figures for 4,35%,
whereas
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 Sweden and Italy almost divide second place with 3,22 and 3,20%, respectively.
Finally
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, Irish
people
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 accounted for 2,21%, followed by Spain with 1,98%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, turkey, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • categories
  • comparison
  • trends
  • patterns
  • economic factors
  • cost of living
  • average income
  • cultural values
  • implications
  • data analysis
  • leisure activities
  • significant differences
  • budget allocation
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