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The table below gives information on concusmer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

The table below gives information on concusmer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.
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The given table provides the
percentage
 of how much money consumers spent on various product categories in five countries in 2002.
Overall
, in
Turkey
,
people
 spent much more money on each category
among
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 other countries,
while
 in Sweden
people
 showed the lowest
percentage
 in total.
According to
 the chart, in
a
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 food/drinks/tobacco category Turkish
people
 are
on
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in
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 the first place who spent more money and accounted for 32,14%, followed by Ireland and Italy with 28,91 and 18,80%, respectively. Italian and Swedish consumers spent approximately two times less than
Turkey
 and the numbers are 16,36 and 15,77%, respectively. For the category of clothing/
footwear
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 there was a leader which was Italy with 9%,
while
 consumers in
Turkey
, Spain, and Ireland witnessed almost the same
percentage
 from 6,63 to 6,43%. The lowest
percentage
 belonged to Sweden with 5,40%.
Furthermore
, in general
people
 in each country spent the lowest part of the budget on leisure/education.
Turkey
 had the highest figures for 4,35%,
whereas
 Sweden and Italy almost divide second place with 3,22 and 3,20%, respectively.
Finally
, Irish
people
 accounted for 2,21%, followed by Spain with 1,98%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, turkey, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • categories
  • comparison
  • trends
  • patterns
  • economic factors
  • cost of living
  • average income
  • cultural values
  • implications
  • data analysis
  • leisure activities
  • significant differences
  • budget allocation
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