In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?
In the majority of countries, more and more people are employing their own physical trainers. In, please of playing sport or doing
exercise
classes. As a reason they can do it the right way if they can do it with a trainer
. There are more pros and developments. In this
essay, I will discuss more positive development.
On the one hand, these days people love to live in Morden society. Therefore
, they are doing always high-level things. on one side physical trainers are hiring their day-to-day exercise
classes. For example
, my friend Sumaya needed to go to the gym and she did not understand how to do it well. Because she hired a coach
and did well taking the coach
's advice. Moreover
, someone
who wants to do well knowledge of sports such
as cricket can hire a sports coach
for him. For instance
, My uncle's son he good cricketer at school. So he wants to go national team. Therefore
, he hired our country's good cricketer and good coach
Lasith Malinga. Now he is a good player and he has started to play national team.
On the other hand
, another one who wants to do sport or exercise
but has financial problems. they can not hire someone
. They do it alone on their ground or at home. but it not going too well. For example
, I am every day doing exercise
at home but it not
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does not
coming
good fitness rather Verb problem
have
than
Sumaya. Change preposition
to
Therefore
, I believe they
we have to Correct pronoun usage
apply
hiring
Change the verb
hire
fitness
Correct article usage
a fitness
trainer
it outcome good
person.
In conclusion, Correct article usage
a good
someone
who hiring
Wrong verb form
hires
fitness
Correct article usage
a fitness
trainer
is more development
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developed
for
day by day rather than Change preposition
apply
do
it alone.if Wrong verb form
doing
someone
who hiring
the Wrong verb form
hires
trainer
is more development
and Replace the word
developed
coming
out well done person.Wrong verb form
comes
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