In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

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In the majority of countries, more and more people are employing their own physical trainers. In, please of playing sport or doing
exercise
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classes. As a reason they can do it the right way if they can do it with a
trainer
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. There are more pros and developments. In
this
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essay, I will discuss more positive development. On the one hand, these days people love to live in Morden society.
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, they are doing always high-level things. on one side physical trainers are hiring their day-to-day
exercise
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classes.
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, my friend Sumaya needed to go to the gym and she did not understand how to do it well. Because she hired a
coach
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and did well taking the
coach
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's advice.
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,
someone
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who wants to do well knowledge of sports
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as cricket can hire a sports
coach
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for him.
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, My uncle's son he good cricketer at school. So he wants to go national team.
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, he hired our country's good cricketer and good
coach
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Lasith Malinga. Now he is a good player and he has started to play national team.
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, another one who wants to do sport or
exercise
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but has financial problems. they can not hire
someone
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. They do it alone on their ground or at home. but it not going too well.
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, I am every day doing
exercise
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at home but it
not
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coming
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have
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good fitness rather
than
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to
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Sumaya.
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, I believe
they
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apply
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we have to
hiring
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hire
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fitness
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a fitness
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trainer
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it outcome
good
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a good
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person. In conclusion,
someone
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who
hiring
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hires
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fitness
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a fitness
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trainer
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is more
development
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developed
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for
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apply
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day by day rather than
do
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doing
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it alone.if
someone
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who
hiring
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hires
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the
trainer
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is more
development
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and
coming
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comes
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out well done person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personalized workout plans
  • tailored
  • efficient
  • awareness
  • physical health
  • motivation
  • guidance
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • exclusivity
  • status symbol
  • inaccessible
  • community engagement
  • social interaction
  • health outcomes
  • personal achievement
  • health-conscious
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