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The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010.

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The charts below show the proportion of expenditure by students, on average, at one university, in 2000 and 2010.
The charts below show how one university spent its income in 2010 compared to 2000 giving the percentages spent on seven different
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 of its operation. By far the most important outlay by the university in both years was on Food and drink and it held steady at 29%.
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, there were significant changes across the decade proportion of spending in all other
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. The most noteworthy difference was in the portion spent on Utilities
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 as electricity and water:
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 increased from 21% in 2000 to 27% in 2010. Other
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 that saw a growth in percentage terms were Eating out: from 4% to 8%, the same as Transport in 2000, leading only to 1% rise.
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, the Clothing area experienced a massive threefold decrease: from 16% in 2000 to 5% in 2010.
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, the Holiday , Sports and cultural
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 held steady at the 5% and 17% respectively.

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