The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.
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The three plans show changes to the West Park Secondary School since it was constructed in 1950. In the beginning, the territory was divided
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four main units consisting of the school building, the playground, the farmland and three main houses. In the period of 30 years, a few alterations were made which resulted in a different planning of the area. The most noticeable change has been to the houses from the northern left corner which were completely demolished and
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a car park and a science block were built. Across from them where the farmland used to be, a transformation had been done and a sports field was constructed.
However
, it is obvious that the main building and the
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entertainment area remained the same. Between 1980 and 2010 the region was altered one more time and some significant adjustments were made. The amount of space for the parking area was significantly expanded, occupying almost half of the whole yard.
Therefore
, the sports ground was reduced in size
along with
the playing zone. Some details were not altered and stayed the same over the course of 60 years,
for
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the educational institution and the main road which is in the upper section of the map. Taken as a whole, the West Park Secondary School has undergone a number of major
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since 1950.
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