Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both society and individuals. To what extent do you agree.

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Social networking
sites
,
for instance
,
Facebook
, have had a huge detrimental effect on
individuals
and local communities.
Although
it is beneficial for
individuals
,I
also
believes
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that these
sites
have
negative
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a negative
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impact on society.
To begin
with, social
sites
has
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become a main source of communication. To explain,
the
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people
who
lives
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overseas easily communicate through
Facebook
with their loved ones. It has become a global village. With the help of social
sites
,
individuals
can
broad
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their social circle.
Moreover
,
facebook
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is
also
a source of employment. To clarify,
people
can show their talents and skills on
this
platform and earn money.
On the other hand
, spending junk
of
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time on
facebook
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effect
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affects
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a person
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person
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mental health. These days
people
allocate their most of time online which
puts
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bad
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a bad
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impact on their health and
study
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studies
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.
Apart from
this
, despite having no knowledge about the specific
topcis
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topics
,
prople
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people
starts
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to upload videos on
facebook
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Facebook
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which mislead
the
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people
. Rumours can be easily spread on
this
site. In conclusion,
although
social networking
sites
proved beneficial for
people
,it
also
have
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negative effects on
individuals
growth and society
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