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Band 5.5

Many companies are developing electronic books. Some people think thoese books will replaced paper books in the future. To what extent do you agree?

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Technological
advancementes
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advancements
 have allowed widespread access to
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information
 without boundaries,
thus
 digital
books
 are widely available.
Hence
, many people argue that hardcopies will be replaced by e-
books
,
however
, many
other
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others
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 argue that
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 copies are necessary. I consider that both are required
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 and in
this
 essay, I explain my reasons in detail. To start with, hundreds of people still prefer to read and learn from
books
 that have been printed because with these their brains could
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 pieces of
information
 readily.
For example
, some
neuroscientists
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neuroscientist
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 researchers have shown that acquiring knowledge might be easier by highlighting keywords and ideas
as well as
 writing them on a paper.
This
being
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 explained because of the
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establishment
 of stronger synapsis in the Central System Nervous,
thus
 robust neural connections to memorize either for
long
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 or short-term.
For
this
 reason, paper
books
 are not considered
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 and remain
as
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one of the most powerful ways of teaching.
In contrast
, the technology is offering many cutting-edge tools that should be leveraged in order to perform some tasks quickly.
Besides
, there are some references that are just available online and the digital access to digital
sourcers
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resources
sources
 is easier and faster.
For example
, most physicians must
known
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 about updated guidelines for treatments, and the upcoming recommendations to give patients not only the most innovative management but
also
 execute the most
realiable
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reliable
 procedures.
Consequently
, electronic
information
 has considerable merits as a resource of
information
.
To sum up
, upsides and stumbling blocks should be evaluated individually to establish the best way for reading and learning. Since there
are
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 strong evidence that
support
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 either paper or electronic
books
, I completely believe that each person has their own
requiriments
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requirements
 and they should use what
it
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is really
covenient
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convenient
 for them.
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task response
Ensure you provide a clear opinion in your introduction to directly answer the question of whether you agree that ebooks will replace paper books. Your thesis statement could be clearer to directly reflect this.
coherence cohesion
Try to use a wider range of cohesive devices and make sure they are used appropriately to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
language accuracy
Be cautious with spelling and grammatical errors, as these can distract from your argument. (e.g., "thoese" should be "those", "analysed" should be "analyze" - be mindful of British vs American English if specified).
lexical resource
Consider expanding your range of vocabulary to avoid repetition and to more precisely express your thoughts. Avoid overgeneralizing statements without clear examples.
task response
You provided a balanced view, considering both sides of the argument which supports a nuanced approach to the question.
coherence cohesion
The introduction of examples, especially concerning neuroscientists and physicians, helps illustrate your points effectively.
task response
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points, reinforcing your stance on the topic.
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