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Vehicle technology is advancing rapidly and cars that drive themselves have already been developed. In the near future, most people will use driverless cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Currently,
people
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 have different views as to whether vehicle innovation is developing fast whether
cars
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 can drive by themselves and whether they are expanding in the future. Despite the fact that automatic
cars
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 have many benefits, it will be hard to predict. I believe that most
people
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 will continue to use normal
cars
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 in the long term. On the one hand, in the future, automatic
cars
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 can replace drivers and It will be convenient for some
people
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.
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 is because , in society, there are a lot of
people
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 who cannot drive
cars
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.
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, older and younger or disabled
people
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 when they go anywhere, they usually have support from other
people
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.
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, driverless
cars
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 can take them anywhere.
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, most
people
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 are afraid of something that they cannot control.
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 is
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 the fact that a lot of
people
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 continue to use the present
cars
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.
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, nowadays, many
people
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 use technology to travel
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 as navigation maps or GPS. In my country, it usually leads to hard and dangerous roads.
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, driving by automatic
cars
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 is difficult to predict and many
people
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 take
this
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 into consideration and want to read more information.
This
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 is because it is between studying and a lot of data that continues to be mysterious.
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, most
people
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 cannot rely on that. In conclusion, I disagree with
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 question . In my opinion, many
people
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 prefer to drive normal
cars
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 rather than driverless
cars
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 because they can control
cars
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 by themselves and for all the reasons I have mentioned above.

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Introduction Clarity
Make sure the introduction clearly presents your viewpoint on the given statement to provide a clear direction for the reader.
Linking and Cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance the coherence between ideas and paragraphs, improving the flow of the essay.
Developing Arguments
Develop your paragraphs with more detailed examples and explanations to strengthen your argument and make your position more persuasive.
Balance of Argument
Try to maintain a balanced approach by exploring both sides of the argument evenly, ensuring your essay fully responds to all parts of the question.
Effective Conclusion
Clarify and expand on your conclusion to restate your position strongly, summarizing the main points of your argument.
Engagement
Engaging with the topic and presenting a viewpoint.
Use of Examples
Providing specific examples to support your points.
Structure
Structuring the essay with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Artificial intelligence (AI)
  • Machine learning
  • Self-navigation
  • Multitasking
  • Smart transportation
  • Ride-sharing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Urban planning
  • Economic restructuring
  • Legislative framework
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Public perception
  • Infrastructure upgrades
  • Technological advancements
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