The diagram belows show the production of olive oil.
The picture illustrates a production of olive oil
starts
with picking olives and finishes with selling in Correct pronoun usage
that starts
the
storage.
Correct article usage
apply
Overall
, there are 7 steps Linking Words
such
as picking, rinsing, smashing, bagging, pressing, separating and selling, 1 ingredient and 5 equipment.
The first step in the process is picking up olives from trees. After getting the main ingredient they are rinsed Linking Words
by
cold water. Change preposition
with
Then
clean olives are belted by special equipment after which the general Linking Words
ingredient
are smashed. Fix the agreement mistake
ingredients
As a
Linking Words
result
might be received 2 products Add a comma
result,
such
as olive paste and olive stones. Linking Words
Subsequently
, Linking Words
there
are packed in bags with holes. After bagging these bags with olive production will be pressed thanks to heavy special Correct pronoun usage
they
thing
. Fix the agreement mistake
things
Following
Linking Words
this
, pressed bags are separated in huge Linking Words
container
in order to distinguish Fix the agreement mistake
containers
in
two separate products Change preposition
between
such
as oil Linking Words
itself
and water.
The process finishes with distributing for storages and Correct pronoun usage
apply
are
going to be Change the verb form
is
selled
for customers.Correct your spelling
sold
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