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The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and chart show data about reading among people under 30 years old. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams illustrate information about reading in
people
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 below 30 years of
age
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
age
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group
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 of 16-17 years are the biggest readers as compared to other
age
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 groups,
while
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 the
people
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 of
age
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group
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 18-24 are least interested in reading. Majority of the
people
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 prefer to read printed
books
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 rather than
audiobooks
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 or
e-
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books
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. The least preferred type of book by all categories
are
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is
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audiobooks
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. 90% of teens
in
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between
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 the
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age
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ages
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16
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of 16
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-17 read an average of 12
books
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 yearly.
Moreover
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, 85% of them prefer to read printed
books
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,
while
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 only 15% and 20% of
people
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 prefer to read
audiobooks
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 and
e-
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books
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repectively
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respectively
. Readers in the
age
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group
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 25-29 occupy the second place in terms of reading with an average of 11
books
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 a year, making it equal to the mean
numbers
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number
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 of
books
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 read by
people
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 in the
age
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 groups of 18-24.
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However
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However,
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 only 79% of them read
books
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,
while
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 81% of those in the ages of 25-29 read
books
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. Just over 70% of
people
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in
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between
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 the ages of 18-24 prefer to read printed
books
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,
wheras
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whereas
 only less than 15% of them prefer reading
audiobooks
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 and
e-
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books
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. The percentage of
people
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 in the ages of 25-19 who like to read printed
books
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 is almost the same as those in the 18-24
group
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,
while
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 around 15% of them love to read
e-
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books
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 and
audiobooks
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, group, books, audiobooks, e-books with synonyms.
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