More and more wild animals are on the verge of extinction and others are on the endangered list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?
Nowadays, many
animals
have become on the edge of extinction
and some of them classified
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are classified
endangered
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as endangered
animals
. This
is mainly because of the illegal hunters and irrelevant
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the irrelevant
environment
. There are a number of solutions which can help to maintain these rare species.
Firstly
, one obvious problem
is that the hunters who
do not pay attention Correct pronoun usage
apply
on
the endangered Change preposition
to
animals
list. In other words
, there are a lot of rural people
who do not respect the law by
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because of
behavior
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behaviour
that
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which
led
to Wrong verb form
leads
extinct
several creatures. Correct word choice
extinction of
For example
, in China pandas which considered
endangered are Add a missing verb
are considered
hurted
by some. Correct your spelling
hurt
Secondly
, irrelevant environment
also
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is also
main
factor in why some Add an article
a main
the main
animals
are on the verge of extinction
. To illustrate, when people
go in
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on
picnic
in their Add an article
a picnic
habitant
, they throw rubbish which Correct your spelling
habitat
make
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makes
environment
unlivable.
There are two effective solutions to the problem
of the extinction
. One way to tackle this
is to implement new laws and regulations. By doing this
, people
will respect the strict rules in order to avoid troubles
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trouble
For instance
, in China Chinese citizen
do not harm the Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
animals
because if they disturb them they will be captured by police officer
. Another method of dealing with Fix the agreement mistake
officers
this
problem
is to maintain the environment
. That is
to say, government
ought to raise Add an article
the government
the
awareness by Correct article usage
apply
educate
the population Change the verb form
educating
how
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on how
environment
is essential. This
solution would hopefully shows
how Change the verb form
show
people
play vital
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a vital
rule
in Correct your spelling
role
term
of Fix the agreement mistake
terms
keep
the Change the verb form
keeping
animals
live
.
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alive
To sum up
, impose strict laws and educate people
are effective in dealing with this
issue. If the state implemented
these solutions, the Wrong verb form
implements
extinction
problem
will be solved soon.Submitted by s_syedy on
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