All people should go to university, even if they are not going to use that education In their job. Do you agree or disagree?

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always become the main role in human civilization. For some

peoples

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college

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for their career.

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, I strongly believe that

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still essential for living.

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's lives. Analysing the benefits of

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from their

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for some job requirements.

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if they contact the alumnus as they have more

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in many companies or their friends since they

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fields.

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may give some benefits

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study

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in university, students learn about any

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relation

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do some business or start

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investing after they get additional knowledge about

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or management business from university and in many

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some

people

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could expand their business owing to networking and ideas

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get from

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. For that

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, learning

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will give you some opportunities for

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from

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like connection and mindset growth.

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may refuse it, but I consider that

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still

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nowadays. I would like to suggest that

people

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should think wisely before making

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merits for them in future.

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