The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
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represent
the information about the percentage of the Change the verb form
represents
population
in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with expected Use synonyms
population
for 2030 and 2040.I will discuss Use synonyms
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this
statement in the following paragraphs in detail.
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Overall
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Malaysia
will have Use synonyms
high
percentage of Add an article
a high
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population
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the population
whereas
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Total
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The total
population
of Use synonyms
these four
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this four country
these four countries
country
are varied Use synonyms
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of people's Correct your spelling
because
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immigration
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.
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migration
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, there are four different countries they are Linking Words
Malaysia
,Philippines,Thailand and Indonesia.There will be Use synonyms
high
increase in the Add an article
a high
population
of Use synonyms
Malaysia
in the year 2040 which is near Use synonyms
to
80% Change preposition
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whereas
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Philippines
, Thailand, Correct article usage
the Philippines
Indonesia
are 50%, 35%,Correct word choice
and Indonesia
55
% respectively.In 1970 Indonesia was nearer to 12% of Correct word choice
and 55
total
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the total
population
and it has been slightly rising to 55% of its Use synonyms
population
. Thailand is been Use synonyms
least
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the least
raise
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population
compared to all Use synonyms
other
three Correct article usage
the other
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country
, Change to a plural noun
countries
whereas
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Philippines
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the Philippines
are
increased to 50% of its Unnecessary verb
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popoulation
in the year 2040. Correct your spelling
population
Malaysia
stands first in increasing the total Use synonyms
population
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with
80%. The total Change preposition
by
population
varies from Use synonyms
country
to Use synonyms
country
because of people migrants.Use synonyms
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