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The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.

The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.
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The line graph provides key information about the change in behaviour by
Chinese
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 individuals in food
consumption
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 over the period of 30 years from 1985 to 2010. The units are measured in the figure.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
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 prefer to spend on seafood.
In addition
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, fish was the highest percentage of consumers.
Whereas
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, Meat and salt showed a similar ratio by the end of the period.
According to
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 what is shown, Inishilay Meat was the lowest rate for
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 around 100.
On the contrary
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Salt was approximately 500
grams
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.
Additionally
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,
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 consumers showed a gradual increase for the next 25 years, almost 200
grams
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 in meat
consumption
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.
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While salt
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Salt
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consumption
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 decreased gradually until the end of the period about 200
grams
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 in 2010. In terms of
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consumption
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, fish was at the top by 600
grams
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 in 1985.
Consequently
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, the percentages fluctuated for the next 10 years and set
as well as
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 the beginning.
However
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, in 1995, the figures increased gradually to the peak of nearly 850
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 over the course of 2010.The graph below shows the changes in food
consumption
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 by
Chinese
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 people between 1985 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chinese, consumption, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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