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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
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The provided pie charts compare the mean household expenses in
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in the year 2010.
Overall
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, the most expenses in
Malaysia
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 related to housing,
while
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 the significant costs in
Japan
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 related to other goods and services,
moreover
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, the proportion of the cost of food was considerable for both
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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. Japanese spent money on other goods and services more than the other facilities just below a third in 2010. About a quarter of their expenditure was related to food and the cost of accommodation and transportation was almost the same at 21 and 20 per
cent
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, respectively. The proportion of health care expenditure was negligible. In
Malaysia
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, accommodation cost was the highest portion by 34 per
cent
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. Food expenses in
Malaysia
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 were more than in
Japan
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 at 27 per
cent
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 and other goods and services charges were almost the same at 26 per
cent
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. Transportation costs were exactly 10 per
cent
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 and a tiny fraction belonged to health care.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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