The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016.
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The bar graph depicts data about the exportation revenues in two years (2015 and 2016) of products that were classified into five categories, namely petroleum products, engineered goods, gems and
jewellry
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jewellery
, agricultural products and textiles.
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, the table describes the difference in earnings between the two years aforementioned, measured in percentage.
Overall
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, petroleum and merchandise modified by engineering were the main sources of income,
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the least qualified was textiles.
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, all goods had an increase in profits except gems and jewellery which showed a decrease. In detail, around 60
billion
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was
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the petroleum exported in 2015, followed by a rise of 3% in 2016.
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, engineered wares represented approximately 58
billion
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of earnings during the first year and climbed by 8.5% during the second year.
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, Gemstones were in third place, beginning just above 40
billion
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dollars,
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, they went downhill by 5.18% in 2016.
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, despite the fact that the textile industry had its lowest profits in 2015 estimated at roughly 26
billion
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, it went up by 15.24% during the
last
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year.
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