In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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advancement, entrepreneurs are using more
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to claim their
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that are new in different methods. The reason is because they believe it can attract more citizens willing to pay for their goods. In my opinion, it has negative impacts
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both society and
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. First and foremost, different brands are trying to emphasize their goods
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news
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eye-catching advertisements. There is no doubt that the action can bring more attention from public pupils.
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, a brand from China which is
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Lee-Ning has been sued
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their
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dishonestly
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. The reason is they promote their new shoes with new technology could possibly increase
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sport
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performance by 30%.
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, after the test was done. It found out the fact that there
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no
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beneficial effects
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athletes. A lot of consumers are trying to refund their shoes eventually.
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, I believe businesses emphasize that their goods are new in some way usually
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to scam the customers.
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, businesses try to claim their
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are new
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also
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and also
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cause harmful effects to
individuals
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. Usually, entrepreneurs always over
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exaggerate
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their technology which is quite cunning in certain ways. And the consumers might believe it which induces detrimental consequences.
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, Xiao Mi
car
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in China
claim
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claims
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their cars have outstanding
off-roads
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ability.
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, there is a family
trusted
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the advertisement and drove the car to
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. And they are dead because of vehicles losing control on top of the mountain.
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, businesses
claims
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their
products
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are latest in some way
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harmful effects to
individuals
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. In conclusion, I believe that
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businesses often
promote their
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are
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that are
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new in some way
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and causes
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causes
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detrimental impacts to both society and
individuals
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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