In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
With
technology
advancement, entrepreneurs are using more Replace the word
technological
advertisement
to claim their Fix the agreement mistake
advertisements
products
that are new in different methods. The reason is because they believe it can attract more citizens willing to pay for their goods. In my opinion, it has negative impacts to
both society and Change preposition
on
individuals
.
First and foremost, different brands are trying to emphasize their goods is
Correct your spelling
in
news
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the news
by
eye-catching advertisements. There is no doubt that the action can bring more attention from public pupils. Change preposition
through
For instance
, a brand from China which is call
Lee-Ning has been sued Change the form of the verb
called
as
Change preposition
for
their
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apply
dishonestly
. The reason is they promote their new shoes with new technology could possibly increase Change the word
dishonest
the
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apply
sport
performance by 30%. Fix the agreement mistake
sports
However
, after the test was done. It found out the fact that there is
no Change the verb form
are
any
beneficial effects Correct quantifier usage
apply
to
athletes. A lot of consumers are trying to refund their shoes eventually. Change preposition
on
Therefore
, I believe businesses emphasize that their goods are new in some way usually is
to scam the customers.
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apply
On the other hand
, businesses try to claim their products
are new also
cause harmful effects to Correct word choice
and also
individuals
. Usually, entrepreneurs always over exagregate
their technology which is quite cunning in certain ways. And the consumers might believe it which induces detrimental consequences. Correct your spelling
exaggerate
aggregate
For example
, Xiao Mi car
in China Capitalize word
Car
claim
their cars have outstanding Correct subject-verb agreement
claims
off-roads
ability. Correct your spelling
off-road
Thus
, there is a family trusted
the advertisement and drove the car to Correct pronoun usage
who trusted
mountain
. And they are dead because of vehicles losing control on top of the mountain. Add an article
the mountain
Therefore
, businesses claims
their Change the verb form
claim
products
are latest in some way caused
harmful effects to Wrong verb form
cause
individuals
.
In conclusion, I believe that busniess oftenly
promote their Correct your spelling
businesses often
products
are
new in some way Correct pronoun usage
that are
Correct word choice
and causes
causes
detrimental impacts to both society and Correct subject-verb agreement
cause
individuals
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