It is quite right that top sports people should be paid a lot of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The earnings of huge income by high-level sports
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that there is no doubt about the high level salary
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top
sports persons
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with their substantial sacrifices. First of all, the time
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a well-known athletic
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they have to dedicate their delightful lifetime on behalf of to successful
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on the top level. They have to
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practices from the time of their childhood. People
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they
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become the blooming star, and sometimes no one can understand the
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seriousness
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of their athletic lifestream. As a sports star ,bring
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glory and
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name and frame to the native country
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not only for
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life
.
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their high compensation seems well deserved for these factors.
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professionals
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in the business world. Entertainment media and trade companies spend lots of money and
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to advertise the top stars
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their marketing field. Correspondingly their privacy and family
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public and they have to invest a lot
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maintain their status as
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.
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, the fashion industry and other media top up leading athletic men as their grand
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and people visualise them as in real
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. From my point of view, except for a few mishandled players, the majority of the athletic
professionals
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Submitted by amalitharangani0Most of villagers are changing their accommodations from villages to cities all around the world. As a result of this countryside residents are lower than town areas.I think this is a negative development and in this essay, I will elaborate my perspectives furthermore. According to this situation, my take on this is, different of the facilities between the town and the village. As an example, there are lots of shopping centres in the city such as house- hold items, clothes, stationeries, vehicles and so on. Conversely, developed educational centres, schools, hospitals with enough facilities are also at the urban areas. Nevertheless, there are lots of companies and unlimited job opportunities in the city area. Also, mostly there are continuous electricity, gas,water and well planned and punctual transport system as well. So people prefer to live in comfortably and moving to cities as they possible. Additionally, villagers and town people's have same basic need. Such as food, accommodation, education, good health and freedom as well. In some countries there is unavailable electricity in the countryside. Also, there is poor transport system, teachers and facilities at village schools. Moreover, sometimes not enough medications and human resources. So countryside people preferred to move to town. Finally, countryside population decreased and urbanisation in cities. In a nutshell, if there is as usual same facilities all over the city and rural areas,as there is lots of freedom in the countryside . My point of view is around the world this point is most prominent in developing countries. on

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