In most countries, the crime rate is often higher in urban areas than in rural areas. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate?
Evidence suggests that in the vast majority of
nations
the percentage of Add a comma
nations,
crime
in cities is higher than Use synonyms
villages
. Change preposition
in villages
Although
there are specific root causes behind Linking Words
this
issue, effective policies can be adopted to remedy Linking Words
this
situation.
There are two main reasons why public insecurity in cities has a bigger share in comparison with Linking Words
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the countrysides
countrysides
. Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
Firstly
, the population density is to blame. Linking Words
That is
, Linking Words
unless
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in
cities
, in rural areas most Change preposition
in cities
people
know each other or are relatives thanks to the small community that they have, Use synonyms
therefore
; it is less likely that rural dwellers Linking Words
commite
a Correct your spelling
commit
commute
committed
crime
. Use synonyms
For example
, a thief presumably Linking Words
do
not steal from her or his family which is not the case Change the verb form
does
for
urban areas where Change preposition
in
people
are strange. Use synonyms
Secondly
,in small regions most of the population Linking Words
are belong
to the same social class Wrong verb form
belongs
while
citizens come from a wide Linking Words
rage
of classes so, lower classes might tend to offense the higher Correct your spelling
range
classe
of society and it can be seen that most of the thieves are poor and have tried to rob a wealthy person.
There are, Correct your spelling
classes
class
however
, some solutions to tackle Linking Words
this
phenomenon. One step would Linking Words
providing
higher education for all Change the verb form
provide
be providing
people
.Use synonyms
That is
to say, the more citizens are educated, the less they turn into criminals, Take a doctor or teacher as an example; Linking Words
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
people
almost never deliberately commit a Use synonyms
crime
. Another viable alternative is to create more job opportunities in order to decrease deprivation. poverty leads to many social problems including criminal behaviours and wealthier Use synonyms
people
do not want to engage Use synonyms
with
any wrongdoing.
Change preposition
in
To conclude
, high Linking Words
polpulation
is the main cause of Correct your spelling
pollution
high
level of Add an article
the high
crime
in urban regions and in spite of all contributing factors, Use synonyms
facilitate
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facilitating
community
with higher education and lucrative jobs Correct article usage
a community
are
the main key to Correct subject-verb agreement
is
solve
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solving
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