Some countries are considering imposing curfews in which teenagers will not be allowed outdoors at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this policy?

many countries are thinking of grand curfews
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so adolescents
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will not be allowed outdoors at
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night
without an adult , and in my
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I think
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is a good idea because always
teenager
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teenagers
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at night
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bad
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things
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. first of all, when teenagers
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are
alone at night it is not good they
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of studies saying the most
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at night .
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