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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among UK residents in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
given
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bar graph demonstrates
inhabitants
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the inhabitants
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 UK
on
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three elements for
the
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apply
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expenditure in 2004 according
age
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to age
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group
 and how
speending
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they spend
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 their money.
Overall
, the per cent of
the
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Food and drink
considered
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is considered
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 the highest level in people more than 76 years , in
constrat
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contrast
individuals years from 61 to 75
undermost
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most
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 level for expenditure. In fact ,
Population
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the Population
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 drift
much
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a lot of
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 money for food and drink
according
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according to
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 the chart
all
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for all
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age
group
 ,
However
 in three categories ( 31-45 , 46-60 , 76 + ) , Respectively pekas up. On the others groups less than fills.
Otherwise
 , the
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of the restaurant and
hotel
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hotels
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 ranging about approximately between 6% to 14% .
Although
, in
age
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the age
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group
 (61-75) higher
level
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levels
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 same in
categories
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the categories
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 for food and drink (76+).
Nevertheless
in
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elements " Entertainment " have proportions
vary
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that vary
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 from %6 to %22.
therefore
 , in
fourth
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the fourth
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age
group
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group,
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 it is considered
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to peaks
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peaks
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peak
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 up around at %22, after that in
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the fiths
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fiths
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the
categories
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category
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 dropping dramatically
until
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to
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 almost %12.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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