In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read anything they want online without paying. To what extend to you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is predicted that reading via
books
or other printed
thing
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will be taken over by reading online. It cannot be denied that the usage of smart devices and
internet
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makes
human's
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life convenient more than ever before.
While
the
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online reading can help us stay updated and
safe
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money, the emotional attachment with the
books
will still be a part of our life. First of all, the internet can transfer news as fast as
the
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sound travels, which
result
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in
rapid
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spread of the news within minutes of upload. It is
also
cost effective
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, unlike
the
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newspapers
or magazines, which need time
as well as
money in printing and transportation. That's why,
people
can get many
books
or papers only
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small amounts of money or even
free
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.
Additionally
,
people
can find sources online anywhere, anytime without having to go
to
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anywhere.
On the other hand
,
people
are
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using
newspapers
and
books
for a long time and it won't be easy to change that habit abruptly. Some
people
are even addicted to the sense of
books
or the feeling of touch and without it, reading is not meaningful for them.
While
some of them are fond of collecting
books
, others don't think their day starts without waiting for the daily newspaper. And I think, daily
newspapers
and magazines cost a lot for production and they won't be useful for other things, they will diminish in the future,
while
books
will still take a place in
people
's
mind
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. In conclusion, the benefits
in
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cost reduction and fast up to date, online reading will surpass the offline business of
newspapers
and magazines
while
they still have
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place in mind for
books
.
Finally
,It is more important to continue reading rather than the media they are doing so.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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