You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune.

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Dear Payam, I am writing to inform you that I came into a lot of money and I am delighted to tell you that good days will come. Actually, we had a big family land that I could sell
it
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week. The worth of the land was above 0ne-million
dolars
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dollars

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and I am really a lucky man that after spending
long-days
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long days

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almost 10 years were taken time.
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Finally
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I
reach
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my dream. I am going to buy a house in Dubai
city
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City

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and immigrate
for living
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to live

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.
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there.

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Then
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, my plan is to run my own
businnes
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business

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and construct a tennis club. I want to invite you to my new house in Dubai and
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funny
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fun

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celebration with some
our
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of our

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common friends
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I will be
bouth
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buying

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a luxurious car in the first month too. I think that I will travel to Dubai three days later and after buying my
accomodation
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accommodation

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I will keep you posted
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when

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you come. I am going to book some rooms and salons for our celebration in the big hotel.Please let me know if you are interested in coming. I look forward to your reply. Best wishes, Payam

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Coherence & Cohesion
Consider using transition words to better connect sentences and paragraphs, enhancing the flow of ideas.
Grammar & Accuracy
Double-check for typos and minor grammatical errors to polish your writing. While these do not significantly impact the clarity, they can detract from the overall professionalism.
Task Achievement
To further enhance task achievement, you could expand on how the money will impact your life and share more details about the celebration plans.
Task Achievement
You successfully informed your friend about the source of your fortune, your plans for the money, and invited them to celebrate, which fulfills the prompt requirements.
Tone & Register
Your closing salutation is warm and appropriate, contributing to a suitable tone for the letter.
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