Food has become easier to prepare what changes do you think has been made as a result.

In the
last
few decades, some people used to
food
companies when they can not prepare
foods
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food
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at home and they have
lot
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of
works
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.
For example
, developed countries have
food
preparation companies.
Therefore
,
this
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companies might facilitate people’s
life
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. On the one hand,
world
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is developing more than past and in
21st
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century, people’s simple problems
decide
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to
easier
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. The development of technology and science promoted the enhancement of crop production, which favoured the growing of diverse species of vegetables, fruits and greenery in different seasons. The genetic enhancement of bean seeds,
for instance
, developed by scientists in Brazil, made the beans crop stronger to
stand
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cold weather conditions in the south of the country.
Thus
, the local population can enjoy the harvest even out of season production, preparing their meals.
In addition
to it, there is the factor information. The access to the Internet has enlarged our repertory of
food
. Through
this
, we are able to learn about different kinds of dishes, what we need to cook them and how to prepare them. Through the usage of media,
such
as videos,
for example
, we can see the steps of the cooking process and how it has to seem
at the end
. In conclusion, in my view, I think
food
has become easier to prepare, people have a lot of leisure time and particularly mother’s life is facilitating more than past. They have more me time
at
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one day.
Therefore
, easy
food
preparation can help busy people.
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