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The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.
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The provided chart gives information about the number of levels
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air
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of air
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pollution
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 among four countries in 2012. Namely
China
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, America, Japan and
Australia
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.
Overall
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, it is obviously seen that
the
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 analyzed year
the
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with the
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 highest
percentage
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 of
air
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pollution
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 was
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China
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in China
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,
whereas
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 the lowest
percentage
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all
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of all
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 of the types of
air
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pollutions
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pollution
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observed in
Australia
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. Coming back to the details, among
air
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pollution
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, the highest rate was industry, accounting for 80%, which was observed in
China
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,
on the contrary
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, the lowest rate was recorded in
Australia
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. The
percentage
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 of
air
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pollution
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 (electricity generation, transport, industry) in
Australia
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 was less than 20%,
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 in
China
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 it was about 60% or more. Comparing the other two countries, the
percentage
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 of
air
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pollution
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 there varied significantly: in Japan,
air
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pollution
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 from industry was greater than in America,
while
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air
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pollution
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 from electricity production was four times greater than in Japan. The
percentage
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 was approximately 57% and 8% respectively,
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however
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 the
percentage
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 of
air
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pollution
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 from transport is similar to both countries and was 25%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollution, china, australia, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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