The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.
The bar chart below provides information about air
pollution
levels and
its
Correct pronoun usage
their
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sources between the different countries. In general, the country which has the highest air
pollution
level is China.
By contrast
, Australia has the lowest degree of
pollution
In
the
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apply
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China
mostly
Correct your spelling
most
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Industry creates
pollution
which is 80
PPM
,
while
Transport and Electricity Generation
has
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have
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70 and 60
PPM
respectively.
Furthermore
, in
the
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America Transport
makes
Verb problem
has
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the highest value of air
pollution
which is nearly 60,
while
Industry and Electricity Generation
produces
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produce
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slightly less. (38 and 30
PPM
)
On the other hand
, Japan which placed third in the bar chart has a significant difference in the indicators between Industry and Electricity Generation which is 42 and 10.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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Australia
that
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which
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produced the lowest level of
pollution
has similar rates which
is
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are
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nearly 20
PPM
.
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