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Band 5.5

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2021.
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The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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on
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apply
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transport and use in Edmonton
Overall
Linking Words
,
the
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apply
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 as can seen from the table, people’s reasons for using the car in
city
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the city
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divided
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are divided
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to
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into
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group
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groups
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.
For example
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, the majority of those
using
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used
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 to commute work.
For taking
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Taking
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 children to school using only 40% of all,
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However
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However,
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 It is more than Leisure Activities and shopping. Business
take
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takes
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 45%. But is 10% less than
Commute
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the Commute
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 to
work’s
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work
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 percentage. Shopping and leisure activities
the
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have the
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 lowest proportion between 5 reasons It is clear from
pie
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the pie
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 chart that the majority of people use cars. Light Rail Transit approximately one in three of all transport by people. Bus and Taxi use insignificantly percentage of all. It is 10%

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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