You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune.

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Dear Xhixhi, Hello Xhi, I hope you
still
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are still
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in great condition when you
receieve
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receive
this
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message. I am writing
this
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letter to
infrom
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inform
you that recently
i
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got
lot
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a lot
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of
money
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, i never
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can gain
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money
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.
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is become
lucky
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a lucky
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moment
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for me.
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, I never
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that
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can got
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of
money
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from my
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in
capital
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the capital
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market,
i
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started
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investing
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in one of
bank
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the bank
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stock
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stocks
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in
capital
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the capital
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market
in
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last
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year and I never
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these.
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, yesterday I
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it in my investment app and when
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saw my stock the profit
almost
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was almost
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90%.
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amazing
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an amazing
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moment
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for me i never
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profit
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a profit
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as big
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this
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as this
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before. I am going to buy some property
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as a house and
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land, if you have good
refrensi
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reference
about
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for
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great
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the great
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property you can
infrom
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inform
in from
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money
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the money
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if you can help me.
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, if you have
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free time
in
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this
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weekend please come to my house,
i
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have plans
for
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to
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conduct
private
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a private
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party to celebrate
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moment
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.
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, you can invite your couple
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to
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join with as
,
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it will be
stunning
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a stunning
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moment
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for us. Ocean thanks for your nice attention, I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Your
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sincerely, Mr.Binbin
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Grammar and Punctuation
Try to use proper punctuation and sentence structure for clearer communication. Frequent punctuation errors can interrupt the flow of the text.
Clarity
Consider revising segments that feel slightly awkward or unclear to strengthen the overall clarity and impact of your message.
Coherence
To improve coherence, make sure each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next. Using linking words effectively can help achieve this.
Tone
While informal language is acceptable in a letter to a friend, maintaining a certain level of formality can help in clearly expressing ideas without diminishing the personal touch.
Engagement
Your enthusiasm and excitement about the good news are effectively conveyed, making the letter engaging.
Structure
The structure of the letter, including the opening and closing, is well handled, creating a friendly tone.
Content
You've clearly addressed all parts of the task, providing detailed explanations and extending an invitation that adds a personal touch to your letter.
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