The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the number of
stores
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that switched off and the new
stores
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that opened in a specific country in the period of time from 2011 to 2018. In general,
although
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, both closed and newly opened shops had fluctuation, their trends decreased eventually. And what stands out from the graph is that the total of closed
stores
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was more than closed
stores
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after the middle of 2011. As regards opening shops, it was over 8000 markets which was the maximum number in
this
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period of time,
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it decreased dramatically to 2012 which was not as fortunate as closed markets. At
this
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point, it went up gradually until 2014 which was not quite as successful as closures which was just over 6000.
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it was reduced to 4000 in 2015 which was much more successful than closed outlets and from 2015 to 2016 it remained stable that in
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year at 4000, the number of closed markets increased significantly, and at
this
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point, it increased steadily to just over 4000,
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, it was decreased gradually to 3000 which was nowhere as successful as the closed shops. Looking at the details, the sum of closures started at approximately 6500 which was reduced steadily to just under 6000
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it had ups and downs to over 6000 from 2012 to 2014. At
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point, it plunged from about 6400 to under 100o in 2015 which was the bottom of the list,
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, it shot up to just over 5000 in 2016 which was in seventh place as same as in 2018.
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from 2016 until 2018 it was fluctuation.
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