The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
The diagrams illustrate some changes in Darwin over a period of time, from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
, it is clear that
the town changes
considerably with the introduction of new features shown in the map of 2014. It is noticeable that Darwin became more accessible and there were more buildings and facilities.
In 2014, Wrong verb form
has changed
while
3 more residential buildings were built, a university building was built next to them. The third swimming pool was opened on the left side of the lake. In 2009, the town was completely with an industrial area, but those areas were planted with trees in 2014.
As well as
the buildings and trees mentioned above, a footpath was built towards the harbour to accommodate people taking ships. A footpath was built to connect the inner area of the town with the Barbour. Finally
, the convention centre, the school and the lake remain located in the same place.Submitted by unknown on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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