Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspect of their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,

while

some individuals fear their control of

our

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lives is taken over by

technology

more and more, other

people

, including me, believe many positive developments in all

aspect

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of their lives can cause

as a

result

of

technology

. On the one hand, some

people

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argue that advancements in

technology

lead to

being

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convenient

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. If technical machines develop gradually, they will be smaller and more precise.

Then

it leads to more useful tools and methods

at

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the

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some aspects of living.

For example

, some new machines for diagnosing

of

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diseases and tools for engineering are producing more and more.

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, from an environmental viewpoint, a

technology

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technological

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progression is developing some

state-of-art

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methods for providing several cars

no

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need

to

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fossil fuel. These cars omit fume emission and decrease air contaminant, so that they provide

better

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environment.

On the other hand

, one other group of

people

claim that unemployment increased and cyber security

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a threat.

Firstly

, they insist that technological advancements lead to producing new robots which are time and

cost efficient

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.

This

result

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results

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in

employer

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employers

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being reluctant to recruit new employees because of paying income and pension.

As a

result

of decreasing extra costs by robots, the rate of unemployment would increase.

Furthermore

, developing new

gadget

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gadgets results

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result

in stealing some private information from communication among

people

.

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, telephones, mobiles, email and so on. Everyone can provide these gadgets and use

it

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them

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.

Then

,

this

information which is saved by these gadgets

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everywhere.

However

, I do not find

this

argument convincing as

machine

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machines

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cannot adapt

in

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different environmental

condition

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conditions

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and they should check on a regular basis. Governments should pass laws to

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access

these

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gadgets and impose heavy

fine

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for each person using

these information

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. In conclusion, I believe gradual positive development

as a

result

of

technology

, because of being convince and environmental benefits.