The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The two line graphs captured the percentage of having electric devices, and the amount of time consumed to finish the housework, which took place in one country, that started from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, at first glance at the line graph, the hours needed for housework showed a downward. Another noticeable feature, the usage of Linking Words
vacuum
Use synonyms
cleaners
and refrigerators continuously increased.
Digging into the first forty years, on the one hand, the number of using the three devices increased. Use synonyms
However
, refrigerators figure sharply increased, Linking Words
while
depending on Linking Words
vacuum
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cleaners
gradually grew, Use synonyms
also
, the usage of washing machines slightly Linking Words
raised
. Verb problem
increased
On the other hand
, the percentage of time consumed for chores gradually dropped. Linking Words
Additionally
, in 1960, the rate of using washing devices and Linking Words
vacuum
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cleaners
was the same.
During the rest of the study, from 1960 to 2019, Use synonyms
firstly
, both the statistics of refrigerators and Linking Words
vacuum
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cleaners
slightly grew, next they remained stable, but the rate of washing machines was swing during the whole study. Use synonyms
However
, the number of hours needed to finish chores slightly dipped at the beginning , and Linking Words
then
it remained stable, after that, by the end of the study, it dropped again.Linking Words
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