Some people say that some urgent problems in modern society can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree
The global warming problem is become serious in recent years. Many
countries
are trying to promote the
how to slow down the global warming problem. They promote Correct article usage
apply
use
less Correct article usage
the use
platic
bags, Correct your spelling
plastic
use
less water for showering, Wrong verb form
using
eat
more vegetables Wrong verb form
eating
instead
of meat etc. However
, to effectively slow down the global warming problem not only promote
in one country Verb problem
is it
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
enough
but Correct determiner usage
apply
also
need
to Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
promote
Wrong verb form
be promoted
in
Change preposition
apply
global
. Change the word
globally
Therefore
, international cooperation is needed.
Secondly
, the spread of infection
diseases like COVID-19. It demonstrates the importance of international cooperation. Some of the country distribute the vaccines and send Replace the word
infectious
or
sell Correct pronoun usage
them or
the
Correct pronoun usage
them
other
Change preposition
to other
countries
to prevent the
death Correct article usage
apply
of
infection. The Change preposition
from
immegrate
policy Correct your spelling
immigrate
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
affect
Correct subject-verb agreement
affects
in
between the Change preposition
apply
countries
. How and when do
they Verb problem
apply
allowed
the visitors Change the verb form
allow
visit
their Fix the infinitive
to visit
countries
and which countries'
visitors are they Change noun form
countries
allow
to visit is important too.
Wrong verb form
allowed
To conclude
, the
urgent problems can solved with international cooperation if we can cooperate effectively and correctly.Correct article usage
apply
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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using a wider range of cohesive devices and more varied sentence structures to enhance clarity and flow. Incorporating transitions between ideas and paragraphs can make your argument more compelling.
Task Achievement
Expanding on your examples with more depth and detail can strengthen your argument. Providing concrete data or historical precedents can make your cases more persuasive and your essay more impactful.
Task Response
You effectively addressed the prompt by discussing the necessity of international cooperation in solving global issues, such as global warming and infectious diseases.
Structure
Your introduction and conclusion were clear, directly addressing the statement and your stance, which helps in framing your argument effectively throughout the essay.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite