The line graph shows information about the number of museum visitors in the UK in summer and winter of 2005

The line graph shows information about the number of museum visitors in the UK in summer and winter of 2005
The line graph
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information about the number of
museum
visits in the UK over the
summer
and
winter
seasons in 2005
Overall
, that of visitors in
summer
is seen the highest trend at twelve o'
clock
and people who came to
museum
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in
winter
experienced a lower trend
According to
the graph
that
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of
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in
summer
started from 650 people at ten o'
clock
while
in
winter
published gradually dropped rate and 400 people at 10 o'
clock
in 2005.
Then
, guests in
museum
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a museum
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in
summer
figure showed rapidly grew and reached
to
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1300
human
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during
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the rate of guests in
winter
recorded slightly fell to 350
human
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. Alternatively, in
summer
recorded a gradual
rose
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and reached
to
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1500 wight at twelve o'
clock
. And in
winter
showed slowly increased to 600
person
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at 12 o'
clock
. After in
winter
at 15 o'
clock
displayed sharply declined to 0 body. And
this
time visitors
in
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museum
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museums
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in
summer
trend saw a slight drop to 900
body
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.
And there
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was no change in
winter
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the winter
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population until 18 o'
clock
and there was minimal change in
summer
and
published
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slowly fell to 800 head at 16 o'
clock
, After,
this
result
demonstrated
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swiftly dipped to 400 head.
Then
, the number of guests in
museum
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in
summer
showed
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steeply deteriorated to 0 individual 220 words
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, summer, winter, clock with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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