Somepeopleprefertolivewitharoommate.Othersprefer to live alone. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two options do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer

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In today's
life
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life,
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there are 2
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types
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of people: who cannot live without
a
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communication and who want to be alone. But what impact can it make on us?
To begin
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with, a lot of teenagers when they move out for university, it is convenient to share an accommodation with
someone
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. You can split the bill and spend money on something more important.
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, when we live with
someone
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, it allows us to talk, go out or even have an
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which in the end develops people's
communations
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communications
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skills. But
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with life with a roommate, a lot of people do not want to be bothered by
someone
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, they have a low capacity of energy for communication. And they just feel better spending time
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their own.  In my opinion, I consider myself an
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extrovert
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, so I would like to live with
someone
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because it can be tedious for me to be constantly alone.
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, we have to choose the best option for us
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and
live how we want to live.
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Task Achievement
Your essay does well in presenting a balanced view of the advantages of living with a roommate and living alone. However, more specific examples could enhance your argument. Try to include real-world examples or hypothetical situations to illustrate your points more vividly.
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Your essay has a basic structure, but the ideas could be more effectively organized. Consider using clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader. Also, transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow of your essay.
General
Proofread your essay for minor errors in spelling, punctuation, and grammar. While your ideas are clear, attention to these details can improve the overall professionalism and readability of your text.
Content
You present a balanced view by discussing both sides of the issue.
Personal Opinion
You effectively convey your personal preference, providing a clear stance on the topic.

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