As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the 21st
century
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century,
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the usage of the
internet
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is ever-increasing. It is true that the newspapers are becoming out of fashion and are being replaced with more
user friendly
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online platforms.
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with,
due to
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the
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technological
innovations
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innovations,
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people find it easier to write and read when using
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online facilities when it comes to gathering
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information. The reasons for
this
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are the affordability, time and money savings that can be achieved using the
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internet
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.
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, If we use the newspapers to find news
initially
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paper has to be purchased and the price is comparatively higher than the online resources. Not only that but
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the difficulty to read when people travelling is
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a major factor for
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shift. But
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electronic items
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as laptops and
smart phones
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smartphones
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provide informative and more understandable
medias
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media
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to provide quality output for the users with the combination of
internet
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facilities.
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, the environmental damage that the printed paper can do has become a debatable factor. The reason behind
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is the toxic ink that
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to print the letters usually
contents
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contains
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heavy metals
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as tin and mercury can contaminate the water bodies and eventually
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the health of the people
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the animals. By taking
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these damages, environmentalist
are
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directly forcing the printing shops to move towards
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eco-friendly ways to type their news and data. In conclusion, It has to be agreed with the movement towards the
internet
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while
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keeping away old methods of
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. I strongly believe that the
,
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various advantages that
offer
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are offered
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through
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this
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the
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internet
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is
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countless and citizen should adopt
this
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change to their lives bearing some negligible hardships.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Access
  • Convenient
  • Fast
  • Expensive
  • Wider range
  • News sources
  • Perspectives
  • Readership
  • Demographics
  • Physical
  • Tangible
  • Reading experience
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