There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experiences or knowledge
Evidance
suggests that Correct your spelling
Evidence
human's
activities are the main causes of global warming. Change noun form
human
Although
there are spicific
root causes behind Correct your spelling
specific
this
problem, effective policies can be adopted to remedy this
situation.
There are two main reasons why people are to blame for growing
weather Correct article usage
the growing
temperature
. Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
Firstly
, over population
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overpopulation
damage
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damages
environment
which Correct article usage
the environment
is
Verb problem
plays
the
key role Correct article usage
a
to
temperature rising . Change preposition
in
That is
, the more the birth rate grows, the more facilities are needed which leads to global warming. Take the number of non-standard cares
in developing Fix the agreement mistake
care
countires
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countries
such
as iran
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Iran
an
example; vehicles release a significant amount of carbon dioxide and harm Change preposition
as an
ozone
layer which Correct article usage
the ozone
make
a huge contribution Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
in
climate change. Change preposition
to
Secondly
, deforestation by logging
industry is responsible for Correct article usage
the logging
this
issue. That is
to say, cutting down the
trees in order to make Correct article usage
apply
accomodations
and wooden Correct your spelling
accommodations
furnitures
is a lucrative job for many businesses around the world and Change the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
this
practice has been rising
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raising
temperature
to the worst.
There are, Correct article usage
the temperature
however
, some sloutions
to help Correct your spelling
solutions
reducing
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reduce
human's
carbon footprint. One step would be Change noun form
human
rising
awareness and encouraging the public to use public transportation or fumeless vehicles. Correct your spelling
raising
For
instance
in many Add a comma
instance,
countries
people have been already using subways and bicycles Add a comma
countries,
instead
of their own cars because they know about the danger of their activities. Another viable alternative is to make some ground rules for companies which have a
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apply
contribution
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contributed
in
making jungles Change preposition
to
to
the desert. Change preposition
into
For example
, obligating companies to plant more and more vegetation in other places could help decreasing
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decrease
the
climate change.
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apply
To conclude
, The most important reason for global warming is human practices. In spite of all contributing factors, informing people about the impact of their behaviour may solve this
problem.Submitted by m.tavasoli18 on
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