The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

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salaries who worked in secondary and high school in five

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nations including Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Korea and

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in 2009. It can be seen that the highest

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to Luxembourg's teachers and Korean tutors had the longest

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to reach the maximum level of income. looking at details. Luxembourg's starting point was 80,000US$ and to achieve the highest income with 13900US$, teachers had to wait 30

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34 and 37

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for Japan and Korea with 62,400US$ and 84,500US$ respectively.

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needed to wait 9 and 8

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48,00US$ and 54,000US$.

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, their starting point was 34,000US$ and 47,000US$ respectively.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

annual salary
gross income
net income
cost of living
purchasing power parity (PPP)
economic indicators
wage disparity
median wage
livable wage
compensation package
inflation rate
educational funding
professional development
currency exchange rates
teacher retention
standard of living
qualifications
experience level
tenure
collective bargaining

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The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.

some people think that arts subjects such as Drama and Music are an important part of a school education. Others, however, think that they are a waste of time and resources. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

An increasing number of professional such as doctor and teacher are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. what problem does this cause and what are the solutions?