The table give information about salaries of secondary/high school teachers in fivr countries in 2009.
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salaries who worked in secondary and high school in five Change preposition
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nations including Australia, Denmark, Luxembourg, Korea and Correct your spelling
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in 2009. It can be seen that the highest Capitalize word
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to Luxembourg's teachers and Korean tutors had the longest Wrong verb form
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years
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looking at details. Luxembourg's starting point was 80,000US$ and to achieve the highest income with 13900US$, teachers had to wait 30 Use synonyms
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34 and 37 Correct subject-verb agreement
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years
for Japan and Korea with 62,400US$ and 84,500US$ respectively.
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Australia
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teacher
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years
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salaries
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48,00US$ and 54,000US$. Change the verb form
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, their starting point was 34,000US$ and 47,000US$ respectively.Linking Words
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